Memea fire not to be put out
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Original: 2/6/2007 10:01 PM
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Tuesday, February 06, 2007

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 counter - 2.6.07

when plans laid soft and laid with care
and pawns finessed all into place
align not straightaway and fare,
compounding always, as disgrace;

when solemn thought and meditation
(just as water flows o'er falls)
give way to deed and dedication
which, nonetheless, give way to pall;

when endless striving comes undone
and effort doesn't make the grade
when knowledge someone else has won
twice strikes you (loss and guilt for hate)

the every motion that is made -
attempts to mend the mournful mess -
and every thought of loss repaid
all end in 'ell with no egress:

at times the stars themselves array
to throw back down attempts, in vain,
to make of misery a day,
instead, for music when there's rain

make no mistake, nor mar intention -
struggles still should strong be made
to temper tears and break convention;
answer all arrears unpaid

but path-seek not unto perfection
else, upon yourself, inflict
the merciless lessons and directions -
life will strike e'en when you're licked.
 Posted 2/6/2007 10:01 PM - 120 Views - 0 eProps - 1 Comment

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Wow this is actually really cool. And I normally don't really like poetry, so that's saying something. Very impressive maintaining of iambic tetrameter for most of the poem. Not sure if I fully understand all of it, but it flows well and has some ideas in there I can definitely relate to; I especially like the last stanza regarding perfectionism, very true, and very much something I'm familiar with.
Posted 5/4/2007 10:46 PM by Nick - reply


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